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Introductory sentences in fanfic...

  • Oct. 20th, 2009 at 12:52 AM
allaire: (oz-kiss)
...that make me go "ouch":

Carefully he tried to sit up, running his shaking left hand through [his hair]. Drawing that same hands down his face he caught skin on stubble [...].
:::sporfle:::

No, you dummy, for that he used his other pair of hands.

He's secretly Kali, you know. All handsy, all the time.

:::falls over laughing:::

Sorry. Work sucks, the weather sucks, my mood sucks, and it's that time of the month again. Wanna sleep. Wanna chocolate. Want it to be Friday evening already.

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